[Dragaera] Is less more Paarfict?

[Howard Brazee]

Davdi Silverrock wrote:
> Changing the location of "you perceive", and adding a "nearly".  Two
> revisions this time:
>
> Revision Mk. 26.long:
>
> ...
> perceive, this nearly unremarkable garment of sadly cheap and common
> fabric you now see before you, which is merely some sort of shirt.
>  --  Two words from a certain Gentleman of the House of the Hawk.
>
>
> Revision Mk. 26.short:
>
> ...
> to me was, you perceive, this nearly unremarkable sort of shirt.
>  --  Two words from a certain Gentleman of the House of the Hawk.
>
>   
I don't care for "nearly unremarkable" at all.