[Dragaera] A Paarfict Storm

[Diana]

A very minor note, again regarding spacing: double spaces after
periods (or other forms of punctuation) are unnecessary unless one is
using a typewriter font (which I sincerely hope the final product will
not be).

On Jan 19, 2008 6:23 PM, Davdi Silverrock <davdisil at gmail.com> wrote:
> On Jan 19, 2008 3:32 PM, David Dyer-Bennet wrote:
>
> >
> > Gave up nearly hoping for consensus, eh?
> >
> > [&c]
>
> Your words are full of wisdom.
>
> I have incorporated many of your recommendations into what follows.  I
> admit, I am tempted to change "garment" to "shirt", and put the full
> stop after the word "fabric".  But I think this is an improvement on
> the previous.
>
> Revision Mk. 29:
>
>
> My esteemed parents did themselves the honor of traveling to Dragaera
> City for a holiday, enjoying that city's tolerably fine meals and
> expensive entertainments.  However, the unfortunate timing of their
> visit led to its interruption by the riots and uprisings preceding
> that crucial point in our history when the conflict between Lord Adron
> e'Kieron and Emperor Tortaalik erupted into open rebellion,
> culminating in the explosion of raw amorphia that transformed the city
> and its environs into the Lesser Sea of Chaos.  While I am happy to
> report that said parents had the good fortune to escape the Disaster
> and return home safely with their luggage, they pretended that due to
> the haste of their departure from the city, the only token that they
> could provide of their adventure was this nearly unremarkable garment
> made, you perceive, of sadly cheap fabric, in the form of this common
> shirt.
>  --  Two words from a certain Gentleman of the House of the Hawk.
>
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