[Dragaera] Giddy T-shirt par-ergon

[Philip Hart]

On Sat, 12 Jan 2008, Davdi Silverrock wrote:

> On Jan 10, 2008 3:43 PM, Jerry Friedman wrote:

> I did also like the idea of having some sort of preamble, such as "If I 
> may offer two words: &c" or "Here it is then: &c", but I am persuaded 
> otherwise.

Ooh, too bad, "two words" is a real loss.


> In addition, I was strongly opposed to using "I was disappointed", and
> after contemplating the matter, I think now that I can articulate why:
> Paarfi, and those he writes of, tend to be both stoic and ironic.

Excellent point.

(v. 10:)
> My esteemed mother and father, in search of diversion from their
> diminishing duties and mounting cares, traveled to Dragaera City and
> sojourned there at no small expense (enjoying tolerably fine meals and
> wines), just at that crucial point in our history when riots and
> uprisings inflamed the city and the conflict between the Dragon Heir
> Lord Adron e'Kieron and the Phoenix Emperor Tortaalik erupted into
> open rebellion, culminating in the destruction and transformation of
> the city and its environs into the Lesser Sea of Chaos, and while I am
> indeed glad that my parents had the good fortune to escape the
> Disaster with their lives, all that I had the honor to receive as a
> token of their adventure was this very garment that you see before
> you, and which, you perceive, is made of cheap, lightweight fabric --
> a mere buttonless, collarless, short-sleeved shirt.
> --  A certain Gentleman of the House of the Hawk.


I like this.

I don't like "destruction and transformation of the city and its environs 
into the Lesser Sea of Chaos" though - the lack of parallelism for the 
verbs wrt "into" is jarring.  Maybe "destruction of the city and its 
environs and their transformation into the Lesser Sea of Chaos".

I still miss the age ref., but oh well.

V. 11 seems too bare.